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First Strike! (eddy styx)
First Strike
roaming the alleys
I spied a young man
in his early twenties
carrying gasoline.
noticing the sloshing of the can,
his furtiveness dragged me after him.
keeping to the shadows,
I trailed at a distance,
moving when he moved.
He was soon joined
by a red tabby cat,
who wound about his legs
begging for attention.
I identify with cats
going about their
own prowling business.
Watching from the shadows
horror gripped my heart.
Pouring gas on the cat,
he nimbly lit a match,
but the cat fled before
the lit match could land.
Instinctively I jumped,
my bare fist landing on jaw;
he crumpled to the cement.
Dousing him with the
remains of liquid in the can,
I awaited his return
to the conscious world.
When I saw him awaken
his eyes full of terror,
I dropped a match,
springing back
out of harms way,
as his body caught fire
in a violent blaze;
He lit up the night sky,
casting his flailing,
ghastly shadow on the sheds.
The next day’s paper
told of a suspected arson who died
accidentally by his own hand.
A virgin no longer,
first kill has been made
for defense of a cat
I am, somehow, unsatisfied,
For I am a cold-hearted killer
not this thing of unbridled passion.
Comments
lou
Fri, 2011-03-11 13:15
Cat
Truly terrifying
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-03-14 10:34
Dear Lou,
Thanks, dear.
always eddy (love cat)
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-03-14 10:37
Dear Shirl,
I glad you liked it, as it is something a little different!
always eddy (love cat)
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raj
Fri, 2011-03-11 13:56
Dearest Cat...
the stealth...the anguish...the killer statement
For I am a cold-hearted killer
not this thing of unbridled passion
makes this write a thriller....held me captive through and through...
much love...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-03-14 10:40
Dear Raj,
I'm so glad that you liked the build up and the imagery. Thanks for commenting!
always, eddy (& cat)
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Geezer
Fri, 2011-03-11 15:56
A Killer!...
Yes! But not a cold hearted killer! His compassion for the cat, and the rage at what man tried to do, and the furiousness with which he responded, leave no doubt. I think Killer would be happy to make the acquaintance of Eddy. Both Killer and Eddy seem to have a soft spot in their hearts for the weak and oppressed. Your word usage was fine, the pattern and rythm flowed well, and I liked the title just fine.
Maybe we could work on something together? ~ Love ya, Gee
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-03-14 11:01
Dear Sir Gee and Killer,
Huge :) from eddy! I'm so glad you liked it and it worked for you. eddy tips his hat to Killer. I think they could be friends, isn't that weird? Maybe, as they have similar interests and weaknesses. A co-write could be very interesting and I am open to it!
always, eddy (love, cat)
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Geezer
Wed, 2011-03-16 01:55
Sometime...
this next week, we will get together and pick a subject to write about. I am open to suggestions. I will look for message from you. I think it will be fun! ~ Love ya, ~ Gee and Killer.
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Candlewitch
Tue, 2011-03-15 05:44
Dear Bee.
Thanks so much for the video treat!
love, Cat
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