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TORSION

Submitted by Esker on Sun, 2011-02-27 15:30

bend me with this
crimson crush
you twist me in your heady lush
I churn desired
and admonished
darkness cherish
onyx
and lash

bite the torrent
words that flow
and worship
pain that exstacy
extracts below

made me kneel
make me heal

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Editing - rough draft

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pleiades

Sun, 2011-02-27 21:35

erotic redemption
(what is wrong with me?)

i need a cigarette now.....

xx

weirdelf

Mon, 2011-02-28 01:44

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I simply cannot flaw this, it works at so many levels.

All I can say is,
thankyou,
sir bard

cheers,
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pleiades

Mon, 2011-02-28 02:02

had to come back to this

e..............it is SO good

p

Geezer

Mon, 2011-02-28 03:35

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some of your older work. The darkness and sensuality, are superb ! [ecstasy]. Many levels here. ~ Gee

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Kailashana2

Mon, 2011-02-28 07:34

the secret life.

Esker

Mon, 2011-02-28 13:44

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how can I say
that I putter along
and then twist out of myself
leaping natural and incur
a new old self

behind the keyboard
smooth as silk

I exist on this level more then
the reserved

ahh but you all figure that out
by now

how can I read Kerouak
and others
Buckowski

Im darker then I leave
here

deeper then most

these are the spice of my
life

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and commenting here
it means so much

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