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the bit and trod of the savage petunia

pinch of gloss
smidge of sparkle
tongue lubricantly worn
tits tissued
shoes a-bladed
spread cheeks vaselined
rubbers tallied
picture kissed

prelude to a moonlight glow

she is called Kiko
to the tourists
that pay

she is called Lola
to the sailors
that get it

any night at port
every dollar spent
is a story untold

would you?

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Narrative and imagery brave and effective. I question the last two lines. It could be said more elegantly or even deleted. Presuming the
refers to "The Kinks" song about a transvestite, the reference may be lost to many, perhaps you could infer it in the text?

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