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Autumngirl
here I come
in rowanberries hair with coffee in the eyes
we play hide and seek
we are children
and more adults than ever
someone asks me
to dress my love for you in words
I am not sure though I do it
every day
and every day I choose you
it would hurt me
to try to resist
before you I am humble,
my eyes in love
with you I am better than ever
you are my inspiration and
I am your autumn girl
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Comments
Candlewitch
Sun, 2011-11-20 12:45
Hello,
A charming poem to be sure! I like your easy style and how the words just seem to flow. Great title, too!
someone asks me
to dress my love for you in words
I am not sure though I do it
every day
and every day I choose you
Good stuff!
Always, Cat
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Ester
Sat, 2011-11-26 17:02
Thank You so much Cat.
Thank You so much Cat.
Esker
Mon, 2012-03-19 00:30
missed so much..................................................
jump a link...a breath taken and a look back as night hurtles forth the future
this now in waiting pushing dreams at bay
the vivid context of passion seeking ghost shelter relics
and my window slid upon
the night lamps glow on the parking low below
Neo and her charms Neo and her treasures
the poets pleasure
something daring haunted about these words
feel them here
why I read poetry in the first place
why I searched
mysterious gatherings
on pages of font spilling
like spells
and forecasts
a music that surges
like a tide
and opens lost doors wide............................
Thank You!
Ester
Sun, 2012-05-06 05:56
opens lost doors wide..
I love what you've written here on my page .. Yes, how wonderful it is to be able to read all the poetry that is written here on Neopoet. A wonderful and never-ending journey ..
Thanks so much for visiting ..
E
Esker
Fri, 2012-10-19 22:36
May the door from winter.>October the door closed for winter..
listening to THE XX "Stars"
I live on metal nickels and dimes
thankful for internet acess
This internet
the dogs to take for walks..
a breathtaking backdrop of nature
the rail line
the highway
the lake
these streets and factory
the yards full of creek where
the deer gather
and forever the unspoiled night sky
free of lights pollution
autumn girls are rare and valuable
loved
Mon, 2012-03-19 02:11
It's like choking with love....
It's like choking with love
excess of it ...
and
in autumn
for a gal to be within ...
you are my inspiration and
I am your autumn girl
just so explicitly beautiful
as the shyness shedding
Autumn one...
loved
Ester
Sun, 2012-05-06 05:59
to loved
Thank you very much loved .. (Sorry I took so long)
E
loved
Sat, 2012-10-20 02:11
i love to read you Esker
i love to read you Esker
twill be a pleasure to meet you
when i come to Ottawa
but then i wouldn't like to risk my anonymity
oh what a pity
i can never meet ye
in all sincerity
but shall find a way
if wills divinity
loved
the_fool
Mon, 2012-03-19 04:25
i was truly impressed with
i was truly impressed with the first S ant the next few S's followed nicely but then it seemed to fall off after S4. S5 and on is pale by comparison with very little imagery and some old cliches peppered in. definitely needs some work but show a lot of promise.
keep 'em coming
Ester
Sun, 2012-05-06 06:01
to the fool
Thank You so much for visiting my page and for the comments on my poem
I am happy you find promise in my work.. will work on it...
E