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You would ride out

Submitted by Ester on Sun, 2012-05-06 06:07

it was there
when you changed colour
and between sleep and awake
I loved every word

you would ride out and pick bumblebees

your dreaming dizziness
like a mad happy
slot machine

we had a coffee party behind your closed eyelids

to just hear
and caress the edge of your imagination
to feel you as happiness

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

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judyanne

Sun, 2012-05-06 12:39

hi ester

really, this write makes no sense to me
- but i still love the images it gives me
especially
'we had a coffee party behind your closed eyelids
....to just hear
and caress the edge of your imagination
to feel you as happiness'

love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Cloudthings

Sun, 2012-05-06 22:18

beautifully penned with all the imagery left just elusive enough

Ester, this is a delight, beautifully penned with all the imagery left just elusive enough to create an incredible play among what you spread.... It's like a divine picnic of memory snippets to me & so very nostalgic. It just filled me up with joy & longing & just a touch of melancholy in the gaps.

I would have been so happy to have written this one!

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

Ester

Tue, 2012-10-16 13:54

Thankyou. E

Thankyou.

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Esker

Mon, 2012-05-14 00:18

meridian

the tumble of the wheel
the glee of dusk
on her slope against the
wall of atmosphere

star rise
fathoming through
meridians deep

Thank You
your poems are a walk
in dazzling calm lament

Ester

Tue, 2012-10-16 13:55

Thank you Esker. E.

Thank you Esker.
E.

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You would ride out