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T R A N S G R E S S I O N

purity in the fires of ravage dreams
speaking talk
awake and lost

stars beneath and above
like heavens shine
and darkness dousing
rousing gardens of ghosts

you were there
once
in the grotto gate
the pale shadow
glimmer of a smile
the ripple of the
minutes settling
like a first
snow

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thats amazing usually I just leave in one or two..
You know I think you are beautiful influence on the
presentationaly value of my works now
My step daughter has me in messages via Facebook
put in punctuations as she told me its much more
easier to interpret.....I dont think of these things
cant imagine that others would want to read my
messages per say per whole, however now Im
more aware and trying to thinkg of others
Amazing what influence we have on each other
in the spectrum of reality and of course, my surreality
as I like to call it

But thanks to You Rosi
I shall perhaps become more readable!!

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how true..my sarcasm which was my buffer
is needed to be removed and my movements
refined
for maybe I do have something to say
otherwise Why would I continue to write
Its wrong for me to just say this is all an exercise
when in truth its a passion
thus the refinements

Thank You Rosi

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