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rows
how still the sky
that falls between
rows and rows of white crosses
in snow white Yule marble
lies three,
known but to God
"No Greater Love"....
echoes
like Taps in the breeze.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
"Greater love hath no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends."
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Comments
Rottiestyl
Mon, 2011-05-30 08:21
This was pure love on your
This was pure love on your part. Not to forget the forgotten. Simple but screams in it's sorrow. Very nice work.
Kim
(V)
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
By: K. Mulroney
" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."
Kailashana2
Mon, 2011-05-30 11:31
It's also a day I remember
It's also a day I remember those who no longer walk with me.
~A
Pamela A. Lamppa
Mon, 2011-05-30 10:49
Oh that closing line ...
I can barely breathe.
It is a day for remembering. For embracing life and the memories we keep.
Sorrow holds the tear so close to heart in this.
Simply stated and beautiful. ~Pamela
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Kailashana2
Mon, 2011-05-30 11:32
I think my best stuff is
I think my best stuff is *simply stated*. Thanks for reading, Pamela.
~A
Kailashana2
Mon, 2011-05-30 11:39
Hi Kal (the) is not needed.
Hi Kal (the) is not needed. But here's a visual for you.
http://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-fMXpMsZ-zx...
The quarry the marble was cut for the Tomb of the Unknowns is called *Yule*. Humans *Lie* and are *laid to rest*, so lie is correct.
Use your imagination for the last stanza. I know you have one. ;-)
~A