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Poet True
If I had wings and poet’s skill,
a muse at hand and time to kill,
I’d scribe, for you, such noble verses
about the beauty Nature nurses
inside a bud, on bough with leaf,
where wonder is the main motif.
I’d take my pen, like Bard with quill,
pour forth a stream, sublime and still.
Place pleasant poem on the page,
a song of love that would not age,
sedate as moon or starry host,
or sea that creeps along the coast.
If Iines would gleam like dew at dawn,
lay down, like jewels, on leafy lawn.
They'd sparkle with the muse’s magic,
rewrite as tear-less truth the tragic:
have Hector and Achilles yield,
bid both lay down their sword and shield!
If I composed like kindly Keats,
wrote rhymes where earth and heaven meets,
my poems would be less pedantic;
they’d bloom like rustic rose, romantic.
Then I would be a poet true
and I would touch the heart of you!
Comments
Blue-eyed Bolla
Sat, 2023-01-07 06:00
Many thanks Alan for your
Many thanks Alan for your excellent comments. I will look at my little mistake in the first verse. Again, thanks for taking the time.
KBloor
Lavender
Thu, 2023-01-05 09:52
Poet True
So much imagery to love - the "rustic rose" is especially charming and unique. The rhythm is smooth and adds to the delight of the poem.
Lavender
Blue-eyed Bolla
Sat, 2023-01-07 06:17
Poet True
Many thanks, Lavender
KBloor
Geezer
Thu, 2023-01-05 11:44
I would...
change the first word of the third stanza
to read as It's. This is just about perfect!
Your word use is great and the placement of them
in lines of six, makes this a fun and quick read.
I wouldn't change anything else! ~ Geezer.
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Blue-eyed Bolla
Sat, 2023-01-21 07:50
Poet True
Many thanks Geezer, for your insightful feedback on my poor little rhymes. I will take note! Again, many thanks.
KBloor
Rula
Thu, 2023-01-05 14:42
I'd probably
do the same if I'm a "poet true"
V. Much enjoyed the read
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Alex Tanner
Thu, 2023-01-05 14:57
A pleasure
A pleasure and a joy to read. Many should read it and take note.
Alex.
Blue-eyed Bolla
Sat, 2023-01-21 07:51
Poet True
Many thanks, Alex. Glad you liked my poor little rhymes.
KBloor