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Thunder Cracks Eerily

I can't enter the acrostic contest, must be too late. I thought I would share my effort anyway.

Thunder cracks and rolls along
Heavy rains morph into sleet
Undergrowth quails at this song
Nervous at so strong a beat
Desperate animals throng
Every head bowed in defeat
Ravens ascending to meet

Colourful berries abound
Rather like gems on a bed
All these are easily found
Caught in that glare, shining red
Keep your face to the ground
Stopping that dream in your head

Every stake that we play,
even-money, it seems,
Ready backing of schemes
if we just know the way,
like a world that redeems
your last play for today.

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have been a competent piece Keith. I am sorry you've come a bit late. I especially like the first two stanzas. I think the wording in the third stanza could flow better with some tweaks, but it could be only me.
Thanks for sharing.

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Taken and acted upon. Thank you. I might hopefully have done a little better if the poem were not scambled together in an hour or so. I wasn't sure which part of the 31st mattered.

Keith Logan
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Every stake that we play,
even-money, it seems,
Ready backing of schemes
if we just know the way,
like a world that redeems
your last play for today.

Keith Logan
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Every stake that we play,

even money, it seems, [is] (maybe?)

Ready backing of schemes

if we just know the way,

like a world that redeems

your last play for today

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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You are a powerful word-crafter, Keith.
The highest praise, and it is extremely rare, that can be given to any acrostic poem is that it works as a poem even if you don't know or recognise that it is acrostic. This does.
I could offer some tweaking but frankly, if it were mine, I would leave it alone as an accomplishment.

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Feel under no compulsion either way but if you wish to offer tweeking suggestions, feel free to do so. I don't say I will necessarily follow them but be assured, they will be considered. I am here for an interchange of encouragement.

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Very good write, this line read will at a second glance.
But stumble on it with my eyes when first read it.
it seem different then the rest of the lines as if it were the defining line.
It seems to need something to me a better play of the same words
"Ready backing of schemes"
"Readily"

Very good write truly enjoyed the ride!
Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

but I simply can't see how to improve it without adversely effecting the rhythm.

Keith Logan
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