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Rhyme to Free Verse [Spreading Wings]
Original: Not of This Word by Scribbler
Should you see me standing still
eyes unfocused, far away
I'm visiting some wooded hill
where I walked one bygone day.
Or sitting looking at the sky
attention lost amongst the blue
perhaps emmiting a slight sigh.
I'm not really next to you.
The real me only visits here
stopping off from time to time
to check on those whom I hold dear
or dash off some short clumsy rhyme.
Beyond the trails is my true home
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where trees are tall and hills are steep,
the places deer and bobcats roam
not among the human sheep.
So let me walk my wilding way
each day at least a little while
that world of green and mossy gray
which lends to me this quiet smile.
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Free Verse Revision: The Lover
I cherish you and I cannot stop
This infidelity! Her body bends
outside my window, rustling me
to remembrance in every season.
My young boy's body easy,
boldly natural in her forest
(not among the human sheep)
I cherish you and I see her.
I did not know my could eye experience so much blue-
sunny, stormy, sky, light, steely, carolina, true,
electric, baby--
breathing her in
sighing her out
next to you
I cherish you and I confess
with a clumsy nature poem
like a cheater confesses with gold earrings
and a grocery store bouquet
while secretly drinking wine in sunlit tulip fields
I cherish you, and our life, and our house
that is my inn on the journey home
to where trees are tall and hills are steep,
to where deer and bobcats roam
(not among the human sheep)
Indulge this graying lover, please;
Nature dominates this beast.
Arrow’s timeline
- May 2023
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23 TueAnniversary
15 years of membership
- August 2021
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12 ThuReceived a critique
on Rhyme to Free Verse [Spreading Wings] from @Triskelion
"did I miss this? Sorry I'm so late. Arrow's version does convey the general feel of scribbler's poem with an interesting twist by breaking it up into two parts, so that is an intriguing style I will consider in the futu…" - July 2021
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31 SatReceived a critique
on Rhyme to Free Verse [Spreading Wings] from @scribbler
"I can see how you interpreted it as such and once a poet turns a poem loose it is up to others to interpret it as they see fit.In fact this poem was meant to address anybody who happened to see me bemused. The clarity's…" -
31 SatReceived a critique
on Rhyme to Free Verse [Spreading Wings] from @Obadiah Grey
"I completely agree with your "spring board" comment! We all pick each others pocket, its called inspiration. I enjoyed both the original, and your piece, Cheers. Obi." -
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23 WedAnniversary
10 years of membership
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- June 2010
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- December 2009
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03 ThuCritique milestone
1,000 critiques given
- May 2009
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23 SatAnniversary
One year of membership
- May 2008
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26 MonFirst critique offered
on "To Late The Dream" by @poewriter58
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24 SatFirst publication
Cancer (since unpublished)
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23 FriJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
Location: USA
Favorite Poets
Lucille Clifton; Adrienne Rich; Gerard Manley Hopkins; Philip Larkin; Anna Swir; Christina Rossetti; Hilaire Belloc; John Betjeman; Frederick Goddard Tuckerman; Yevgeny Yevtushenko
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Workshops
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| Stretching wings (Let's Begin) | (syllabus) | Olympic Pool | Started 2021-07-20 | Concluded |
| RHYME PATTERNS (let's begin) | (syllabus) | Splash Pool | Started 2021-02-24 | Concluded |
| A NEW FORM ( let's begin) | (syllabus) | Wading Pool | Started 2014-08-04 | Concluded |