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Like Trees
We sway like leaves in the wind,
bend like twigs under pressure,
break like branches in a strong storm.
But we stand,
firm and grounded...
like trees standing eternally,
for our love has rooted,
grounding us.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Kailashana2
Sun, 2011-06-26 19:51
Almost perfect..... Forgive
Almost perfect..... Forgive me, but your poem is so good, I can't help but tweak it.
Leaves in the wind, we sway
bend like twigs under pressure,
storms break our branches
we stand like trees rooted to eternity
firm and grounded...
love has rooted us
to ground
and sky.
~A
~A
CCfire
Mon, 2011-06-27 01:59
I like Ana's advice on the
I like Ana's advice on the poem here Jess, it's got a good foundation although with Aussie vernacular..rooted has an altogether other meaning lol...
Chez
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