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TO THE BASTARD THAT CHEWS ON MY LIVER

i am sick of being sick

tired of not claiming this bastard illness.

knowing it never has left fully

just hides in shadows ready to spring

when i expect it to.

that learning comes from experience

yet i go on as if it didn’t live within me.

won’t loose claw-like chains that drag me into mud

for a while always everyday 7/365.

i rise, i fight, i throw you down to hard earth.

you rise again to hide further, trickster that you are,

lurking with hideous laughters i practice not to hear.

you will not get me you bastard son of sin

even if i have to light myself in flames

burn you out of my existence.

i despise you but respect you

you have a hand on me and inside me.

i do not hate you for i cannot.

no fruit lies there in your thorns you hand me.

me got me here and there led me where

all is a matter of going and following through

ignoring you and staying on course.

serpentining my actions daily to perplex you

reminding you that defeating you is my choice not yours.

i choose me anyday over you,

your worthless attempts to destroy me,

claiming another in big brothers’ goal to wipe us away.

RWC…

11/13/07

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Please do not critique mechanics. The inconsistencies in style are intentional, or correcting them is not important to me.
i pray none of you dear readers, have what i battle daily.
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Submitted by weirdelf on 14 November 2007 - 6:12am.
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I do battle daily, a slightly different demon

you are not alone here. Read Purplemoondoll’s work and many others.
I adore your raw courage and defiance in this work, and it is bloody well written too! Which is a surprise because things so deep too often become shallow in verse.
My applause and prayers,
cheers,
Jess

Submitted by Frost Smith on 14 November 2007 - 1:31pm.
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Welcome to the site...

I noticed your comment on louis’s profile, There are a great many people here who are more than happy to help you navigate this site; everyone gets a message from louis when they join.

You have already started off on the right foot; posting your own poetry; next read others work and provide feedback; a community will grow up around you; if you need anything feel free to ask myself or any other advocates; weirdelf and Iknownobox are great.

Frost

Submitted by rwc88... on 16 November 2007 - 9:42am.

thanks for the welcome

frost,
i have a cat name jackie frost. i like that name. my wife is a smith. as millions of others who changed or americanized once they got off the boat here.
appreciate your immediate reponse to navigation. still learning. wondering about giving feedback tho’. also wondering just how often people do post. do not want to bombard but could. have questions regarding this site and do not know whom to direct my questions to. am in process of completing manuscript for next book - due in by new year’s eve. 2 i posted will be included in next book. copyright issues you’ve hunched prob.
am reading a little everyday since joining. haven’t found you yet unless i missed. seems to be quite like a AA meeting here with all this anonymity, like poets anonymous. small matter tho’. as dealing with life or death, i can deal with anything except ignore-ance.
thanks again and my best i send,
rwc88…

Submitted by weirdelf on 16 November 2007 - 12:30pm.
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The AA bit is just that we

The AA bit is just that we post personally, not for praise, sure their is some 5th step stuff here, but isn’t that true of all poetry?
The big difference is that your work will be appraised as poetry, not confession,
cheers,
Jess