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Wine Dark Sea (Cellar Door poem)

To get the wine
That swells with time
We must ignore
The cellar door

To taste the ships
Upon our lips
The cellar door
Must be ajar

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did it by habit and checked the N/A box without thinking! Oh well, this is a critique of this poem. The title is catchy and drew me in right away. Language okay, the rhythm of it seemed like waves and the theme of wine being a dark sea, pretty good. I like that you ended it with a play of word. ~ Geezer.

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thanks geezer. a little sing song poem, with the sing song word of the day :)

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lovely rhymes and rhythm.
Did you mean "chips" or "ships"?


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and evocative.
A different tone to most of the posts scrawled in blood on cellar doors.

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thanks jess!

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