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Windship Fortune
To lose a day to ennui
Is an abhorrent loss to me
To idle through a waking day
And never leave the path to stray
Where no one else's mind has trod
Thinking thoughts like seeds in pods
That germinate and grow to be
the waves that froth beneath my lee
As my vessel charges full and bye
towards lost horizons 'neath a sky
Of cerulean blue and popcorn cloud
I sing in riots of rounds out loud
To thank my God that I may be
Alive this day of fantasy
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scribbler
Sat, 2013-03-30 23:36
Hello
Rhyming couplets don't find their way here too often lol. You did well with them. I kept reading this and something kept nagging at me. About the fourth time I found it : "beneath my lee". Lee can be on either side but not beneath, Perhaps "before my lee"? Just a thought..............stan
Ian.T
Sun, 2013-03-31 05:01
Josephus
Though I liked this one I thought it just a little stressed in its arrangement, I looked up your words as did Beau and up pops this little piece from Sylvia Plath, Jess (Weirdelf) says that we should read more and your word did just that as I had a few spare moments..
SYLVIA PLATH
Ennui
Tea leaves thwart those who court catastrophe,
designing futures where nothing will occur:
cross the gypsy’s palm and yawning she
will still predict no perils left to conquer.
Jeopardy is jejune now: naïve knight
finds ogres out-of-date and dragons unheard
of, while blasé princesses indict
tilts at terror as downright absurd.
The beast in Jamesian grove will never jump,
compelling hero’s dull career to crisis;
and when insouciant angels play God’s trump,
while bored arena crowds for once look eager,
hoping toward havoc, neither pleas nor prizes
shall coax from doom’s blank door lady or tiger.
Wow! there are a few words here that need to be looked up.
I look forward to your future writes, the rhyming Couplets were a change from what I write, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Frenchf
Sun, 2013-03-31 06:12
I liked the day of fantasy
And the use of the words popcorn and lee
Josephus
Sun, 2013-03-31 12:37
Thank you French. Your
Thank you French. Your comment is much appreciated
Joe
My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.
Josephus
Sun, 2013-03-31 10:21
Thanks to you all!
Thanks to you all for your courteous and enlightening comments. As a solo sailor of 50+ years experience, I view "lee" as short for lee side or opposite the windward side of a ship. The waves indeed do fall beneath my lee. From my experience the inagery and scenes WERE FANTASTICAL but as with most things they are so only in the eye of the beholder. In your case they were justifyable not.
Thanks once more and best regards to you all,
Joe
My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.
loved
Mon, 2013-04-01 13:52
you must have been a marvelous sailor
lots of time at Bay
to compose poetry
while on ships bay
and lee way
you should have given all
a little history
how from sailing
poetry had a call
marvelous
STILL!
NO BREEZE!!!
loved
Josephus
Mon, 2013-04-01 16:18
Thanks
You're right i should have been more revealing on the back story
Thanks again
My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.
Josephus
Mon, 2013-04-01 16:19
Thanks
You're right. I should have been more forthcoming with the back story.
Thanks again,
Joe
My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.