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Wasn't It A Lovely Rain?
It cooled the scarlet rosebud
soothed the lonely path
danced among the lily pods
gathered with the grass
bellowed above tin rooftops
perched with maple leaves
skipped along the river bank
paused beneath the trees
sang softly to the sidewalk
splashed in shallow mud
then, with one small breath, faded
silently into the sun
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Methinks the rhyme is much too loose to be considered Western.
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United States
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I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.
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Ruby Lord
Tue, 2023-08-15 05:06
Wasn't It A Lovely Rain?
Ooooh this was lovely. I liked the way it flowed as if your words were rain. Fantastic peom I could feel every object the rain touched, beautiful, Ruby :)
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
Lavender
Tue, 2023-08-15 20:37
Hi, Ruby,
The rain was so peaceful. Even writing about it made me feel at peace.
Thank you for reading and sharing!
Lx
author commentMichael Anthony
Tue, 2023-08-15 10:45
Loved this L! Makes me look
Loved this L! Makes me look forward to the next bit of rain to see what I see - beautiful!
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Tue, 2023-08-15 20:39
Hi, Michael,
We adore the sweet moments as they come, don't we?
Thank you for reading! I'm tickled that you enjoyed this one!
L
author commentGeezer
Tue, 2023-08-15 16:00
Great stuff!
This one has all the right qualities to make it a solid poem. there is rhyme and near rhyme and it flows very well. Nicely done! ~ Geez.
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Lavender
Tue, 2023-08-15 20:41
Hello, Geezer,
It was lovely, lovely, lovely. And even more lovely. A soft, gentle but steady rain.
Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L
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