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washed away
I saw her in my dreams
as she slipped below the water
nobody ever noticed
that she was someone's daughter
She looked just like a cat
As she slinked into the deep
She sank with every moment
that somebody couldn't keep
It caused a ripple to the still
just like a fallen tree
"I came to heal the sick,
why would I heal the well"
But she knows as she slipped away
that time will never tell
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Geezer
Wed, 2021-09-15 13:31
I like the rhyme...
but I'm not too sure of the motive. ~ Geezer.
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Cala Lily
Wed, 2021-09-15 16:55
motive? Its always for
motive? Its always for someone to read between the lines
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author commentGeezer
Wed, 2021-09-15 21:49
I guess...
that is your motive then, to make us read between the lines.
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Cala Lily
Thu, 2021-09-16 02:46
I believe that poetry
I believe that poetry connects us to what language can't hear, I didn't know art required a motive... I suppose I'm just scared to reveal more than the metaphor
author commentGeezer
Thu, 2021-09-16 08:41
Everything...
we do requires motive. Even art! Sometimes, we scare ourselves; we get close to making a statement [with metaphor] and then back off, hoping that no one sees the truth. That's ok, we all deserve our secrets. ~ Geezer.
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Cala Lily
Thu, 2021-09-16 12:23
I have very vivid dreams,
I have very vivid dreams, more real than life sometimes. I watched myself, in the body of a tiger, drown myself.... but it wasn't self destructive, it was peaceful.( I should mention I'm not suicidal....just lost) I referenced the bible because it was taught to me, but it contradicted my dreams...I dont know why. I have been experiencing the backside of life's offerings so I just hit the pen to paper, and felt I should awkwardly share it. Ya, I suppose that's it
author commentJackweb
Wed, 2021-09-15 19:18
Can I call it fantasy?
"I came to heal the sick,
why would I heal the well"
I was ruminating about this line. It reminds me of Christ's state in new tastament.
Lol! Are you the Messiah here?
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Cala Lily
Wed, 2021-09-15 22:04
I don't know if your mocking
I don't know if your mocking me...its ok if you are
author commentJackweb
Sun, 2021-10-03 08:35
No! No!! No!!!
Why will I do so?
Cala, don't think that way. Please. I think this is family family of poets.
Thanks for your understanding
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb