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Waking up in the back of the police seat

Oh, bad, boy, oh, bad boy
What are you going to do?
When the cop is coming after you?
For better to act right
Not to play around
To curse and behave maliciously
Or else you serve
your time for crime
during a crisis
to be locked up
at the back
of a cop’s seat
in tears of horror
going for a long ride
to put behind the bar
in a misery state of mind
to defend your case
at your own expense
with every penny that you’ve saved
for the attorney’s cost
to bring you out
from the bail bond
So, think twice before
you take action in your hand

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Not Explicit Content
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively uses a narrative style to convey a cautionary tale. The use of repetition, particularly in the opening line, reinforces the central theme and adds a rhythmic quality to the piece. However, the rhythm could be improved by maintaining a more consistent meter throughout the poem.

The poem could benefit from more vivid imagery to engage the reader's senses and emotions. For example, instead of simply stating "in tears of horror," the poet could describe the physical sensations or specific emotions associated with this experience.

The use of colloquial language, such as "bad boy" and "cop," contributes to the poem's informal and conversational tone. However, the poet might consider using more varied language to avoid repetition and enhance the poem's depth and complexity.

The poem's message is clear and direct, but the poet could consider incorporating more subtlety or ambiguity to provoke thought and engage the reader on a deeper level. For example, instead of directly stating "think twice before you take action in your hand," the poet could imply this advice through the consequences described in the poem.

The poem's structure could be improved by using stanzas to group related ideas together. This would enhance the poem's readability and help guide the reader through the narrative.

The poet might also consider using more figurative language, such as metaphor or simile, to enrich the poem's imagery and add layers of meaning. For example, the poet could compare the experience of being arrested to another frightening or disorienting experience.

Lastly, the poet should ensure that the poem's grammar and punctuation are consistent and correct. For example, the line "to be locked up at the back of a cop’s seat" could be revised for clarity and grammatical correctness.

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