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Unfinished Poems
Does there exist a special place
Somewhere safe in time and space
For poems started, bright with thought,
But never finished? Well, there ought
To be an orphanage for verses
Whose forward motion struck reverses
And never quite became complet…
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
One of those wild hair thoughts...any feedback, suggestions appreciated.
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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neopoet
Fri, 2024-04-19 21:20
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Unfinished Poems" demonstrates a thoughtful exploration of the concept of incomplete creative works, using the metaphor of an orphanage. The poem's rhythm and rhyme scheme are consistent, contributing to a smooth flow and easy reading.
However, the poem ends abruptly, which might be an intentional reflection of the theme of 'unfinishedness'. If not, the poem could benefit from a more resolved ending to provide a satisfying conclusion to the reader.
The use of the term 'struck reverses' is a bit unclear. If it is intended to convey the idea of a poem's progress being halted or reversed, it might be beneficial to use a more straightforward expression to ensure the reader's understanding.
The poem could also benefit from more vivid imagery. While the metaphor of an orphanage is effective, additional descriptive language could help to further engage the reader's senses and emotions.
Overall, the poem is a thoughtful exploration of a unique concept, and with some refinement, it could be even more impactful.
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zuella
Sat, 2024-04-20 04:49
WOWIEEEE i absolutely loved
WOWIEEEE i absolutely loved this! i loved the language, i loved the length, i love the rhyming pattern (not sure what thats called) but it was such a smart play because thats the same type of rhyme style that people mostly associate poetry with so its like you wrote a poem about poetry that would never of been able to be imagined while also feeling so in place and normal. i loved this so much omg. i loved its sort of simplicity and the title is so standard that it stands out, this is such a smart poem and i dont know why there arent more people here going mad over it. this is amazing!
-zuella
The normal fear the poets and the poets fear the normal.
Thank you for your time!
-Zuella
Mary Beth Magee
Sat, 2024-04-20 12:51
Thank you, Zuella
I have so many poor little orphaned poems around, LOL. I appreciate your kind words. I had fun with it.
Thank you,
Mary Beth
Because your words have touched my heart,
I stopped to share a little part.
Be nice, supportive, kind to all
As we walk through this Poetry Hall.
Candlewitch
Sat, 2024-04-20 07:02
hello Mary Beth,
I see AI missed the point... again! I very much liked the ending. It is good to see you getting your feet wet in the warm waters of Neopoet;s fountain ;)
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Mary Beth Magee
Sat, 2024-04-20 12:52
Thank you, Candlewitch
I’m having a great time splashing! Thanks for your kind words.
Thank you,
Mary Beth
Because your words have touched my heart,
I stopped to share a little part.
Be nice, supportive, kind to all
As we walk through this Poetry Hall.
Lavender
Mon, 2024-04-22 15:32
Unfinished Poems
Hello, Mary Beth,
A fun poem! Many poems are bound for the orphanage, just waiting...
Fantastic (unfinished) final line! Very clever!
Thank you,
L
Mary Beth Magee
Mon, 2024-04-22 17:36
Thank you, Lavender
I had great fun with it. It's a reflection of what I see when I look in my work file, sadly.
Thank you,
Mary Beth
Because your words have touched my heart,
I stopped to share a little part.
Be nice, supportive, kind to all
As we walk through this Poetry Hall.