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Thunder In the Catskills...

Silver slashes across the sky
ripping the darkness asunder
Now the rumbling of ten-pin balls
the rolling sound of thunder

Henry Hudson and his crew
drinking rum and beer
Playing ten-pins, smoking pipes
in the Catskills here

The half-moon was re-boarded soon
Sometime in the afternoon
The crew was hung (over)
But non-the-less still sung partly sober

They sang all the way to the bay
Oops said Henry this is not the way
But it was discovered that the ship
Henry's ship had not uncovered...

No northwest passage was divined
They turned about and anchored there
They heard a thundering of sorts
Atonal drums upon the air

From Half Moon to the trees, they took
Coaxed and guided by the sound
When reaching glen, they had a look
Campfires lit with gnomes around

those campfires burned and blazed
the gnomes looked completely crazed.
frenzied dancing into the long night,
it was a totally terrifying sight...

from the branches of trees our sight
told us we were in a life-or-death plight.
barrels of ale turned into barrels of blood

no...it must be a trick of the eyes
from the men I heard mighty sighs
they began to descend from the trees
all was suddenly quiet, stirring not of a breeze...

Until a piercing cry was heard
And Henry's first mate fell flat
The crew stared in horror
Then a domino effect

The gnomes were enraged
Tiny hands twisted in an evil grasp
Their blades glistened against the flame
While Henry gasped....

One by one they slaughtered the crew,
Laughing to see the agony upon their foe,
Their tiny blades leaving limbs askew,
And their antics putting on a horrifying show.

In their act a little while,
Stopping dead in their tracks at one,
Who did nothing but smile,
At the gnomes who thought it was done.

I live deep in the forest, completely alone,
I’m a wrinkled old hag, a stubble faced crone.
No man will have me, so I spend all my hours
studying nature and its magical powers.

You’d be surprised at what I can fashion
from a handful of roots and a lump of wet clay
(Laugh all you like, but this is my passion):
little figures of gnomes, which I bring into play

with my breath and some spit, and a song a bird taught me.
So, when I saw the ship land, and the woe that it brought me,
I sat myself down, in front of my hovel,
and made myself busy, with my knife and my shovel.

As those sailors caroused, I feared they might harm me,
So out of the mud I created an army,
And equipped them with weapons, and frenzied them, too,
by beating my drum to a savage tattoo...

Then the drumbeat became slow
its echoes bounced off canyon's walls
heard by just those down below
who replied with frightful squalls

At last, I cleared my blood red throat
which froze them all to easy prey
each one awaiting my fell smote
on this the eve of winter's day..
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This poem was written in the Collaborative poetry workshop by Geezer, Mark, Rosewood Apothecary, Candlewitch, RoseBlack, Dystopia, Depressed1, Alan Abrams, scribbler
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Comments

It’s really pretty congruent. I think My Love, My Rotting Leaves is still my fav but this is a killer story. Pun intended. Congratulations to all on a well played round.

Tim

a couple of days hiatus before the next one, to let our next starter get an idea of what they would like to start with and then off to the races again! All members of this collaborative poem will be listed as participants in the next one and we still have a place for at least one more member! If you wish to drop out or come in, let me know and we will see about getting it done.
Thanks to all the members of this last one, for the great twists and turns and the fun, and a special thanks to Mark who has worked very hard at helping make this such an enjoyable project! ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

is the next starter?

is Rosewood Apothecary.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

thank you for your hard work and making this a project to be proud of. (and fun) you are great leaders.

*hugs, Cat
(still sick, but not dropping out)

and thanks Carrie for putting it all together!

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

are well enough to participate, and hopefully will continue to get better. Thank you for your eager participation. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thanks to everyone for such an outstanding job and to Geezer and Mark for all their hard work keeping everything together and flowing

~RoseBlack~

that you are having fun. It makes a big difference to the people working on this project. I must give Mark most of the credit for the [hard] work. He has done an excellent job in keeping all this stuff straight and going like a well-oiled machine. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Looking forward to part 3. I think this is such a successful workshop.

~RoseBlack~

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