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thorn of rose

your poem reminds me of
the rose that I once was

who ever tried to prick me wrongly
I pushed ahead my thorn

whosoever loved me
I lay bare all with which I was born

my petals
no resistance
till another rose like me was born

The guys went forlorn
as many came over to my fertilizing lawn..
when many more colourful roses were born
morn after morn

sad so many continued to be torn
mans world they say
why were you a gal born?

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Poignant, Tender hearts are vulnerable and are hurt easily because they give sincerely all of themselves. Well done.


for your appraisal

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I agree with Joe.


raj (sublime_ocean)

to have come my way
and sprinkled water
so that many roses
live love and stay

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this one is a sincere piece. love the ending.


though ur comment is not clear

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which part?

3 what??

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I'm just saying I agree with raj and geremia, that's all. There's 3 of us who agree with each other. 3 in agreement. get it?



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