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thorn of rose
your poem reminds me of
the rose that I once was
who ever tried to prick me wrongly
I pushed ahead my thorn
whosoever loved me
I lay bare all with which I was born
my petals
no resistance
till another rose like me was born
The guys went forlorn
as many came over to my fertilizing lawn..
when many more colourful roses were born
morn after morn
sad so many continued to be torn
mans world they say
why were you a gal born?
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Geremia
Fri, 2015-02-27 09:17
Poignant, Tender hearts are
Poignant, Tender hearts are vulnerable and are hurt easily because they give sincerely all of themselves. Well done.
joe
lovedly
Fri, 2015-02-27 10:35
thank you so much Joe
for your appraisal
raj
Fri, 2015-02-27 11:10
I agree with Joe. Regards,
I agree with Joe.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Fri, 2015-02-27 12:36
so kind of you raj
to have come my way
and sprinkled water
so that many roses
live love and stay
alidzain
Fri, 2015-02-27 17:40
Make it 3 in agreement
this one is a sincere piece. love the ending.
Alid
lovedly
Fri, 2015-02-27 18:01
thanks
though ur comment is not clear
alidzain
Fri, 2015-02-27 18:26
not clear?
which part?
lovedly
Fri, 2015-02-27 21:30
make it 3 in agreement????
3 what??
alidzain
Sat, 2015-02-28 12:36
loved
I'm just saying I agree with raj and geremia, that's all. There's 3 of us who agree with each other. 3 in agreement. get it?
Alid
lovedly
Sat, 2015-02-28 13:29
glad thanks
alidz