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This poem effectively employs repetition to underscore its central theme, which is the constant evolution of life circumstances. The repeated phrase "Things change" acts as a refrain, providing a rhythmic structure and a sense of continuity throughout the piece. However, the poem could benefit from more varied and vivid imagery to evoke the specific moments of change.

The final line, "Some things never change," provides a twist that disrupts the established pattern. This is an effective technique for drawing attention to the line and its sentiment. However, the impact of this line might be enhanced if the preceding stanzas more clearly contrasted transient and enduring aspects of life.

The poem's language is straightforward, which makes it accessible to a broad audience. However, the use of more nuanced or unexpected word choices could add depth and interest to the piece.

The poem's structure is consistent, with each stanza composed of three lines. This regularity supports the theme of change by providing a stable framework within which the changes occur. However, varying the stanza length or line length could visually represent the concept of change and add another layer of meaning to the poem.

Overall, the poem effectively communicates its theme of change, but could be enhanced by incorporating more vivid imagery, nuanced language, and varied structure.

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Hi Will, your poem flows well and I loved the intentional repetition within the lines. It's very effective in this instance.

The 4th verse/stanza doesn't really add much to the poem and has some unnecessary repetition with the final verse? It might work better if you cut the 4th stanza or use another familiar setting?

I remember starting a career
and wishing it would last forever.
Things change.

I remember falling in love
and knowing it it would last forever.
Some things never change.

This is the only thing I found.
It's a lovely poem with a sense of calm and a natural flow. I felt as if I had read your life story here. Well done, Ruby :) xx

second verse, second line: and fifty cents and hour seemed enough (an hour)) remove the "d" from the second (and)

verse four, second line: (and) one bedroom was all we needed. may I suggest that you substitute "and" for (when)one bedroom was all we needed. It feels smoother and reads well and avoids another filler word. we say "and" way too much at least I know that I do!

In this verse:

I remember thinking life was perfect add a comma after the word (perfect)
and there were no obstacles ahead. remove (and) substitute "as" or leave it off completely
and this "and" is unnecessary
Things change.

the last verse is my favorite, as it is the heart and soul of the poem:

I remember falling in love I remember falling in love (,) add a comma
and knowing it it would last forever. knowing it (it) would last forever remove second "it" and remove "and"
Some things never change add an exclamation point after (change)

I very much enjoy your poetry! the suggestions I have recommended will help the flow of the poem run more smoothly. but it is your poem and your decision. a really great poem!

*hugs, Cat

will produce fewer errors. Nice job though. ~ Geez.
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The last stanza...how you knew falling in love would be forever and how it never changed...everything else changed and love remained the one constant in your life. Beautiful!