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I look ahead, what do I see?
stragglers on the path
of my parents' generation
as they top that distant hill.

The same hill which just
came into view
as the boomer mob approaches it
on the well worn twisting route
which remembers each step
each divide and stride.

And now I, a straggling boomer
turn to look behind
and to my surprise I see
sons and daughters looking at me
just as I looked at those ahead
just as all have looked
and always will

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
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Last few words: 
Another detour into unfamiliar territory
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Ah this journey! Hope it to be fruitful for those who preceded, us and our kids!
First line, I thought may be you don't need the question
I look ahead (to /and )see

Second line, "stragglers" do you really need to capitalize?

I liked the " straggling boomer" ,is it your own expression?


Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Thank you for your thoughts. I think I'll keep the first line as is in order to maintain a slight level of surprise that those in front are mostly out of sight now. The stragglers being capitalize was a cursed typo and will be corrected now. "straggling boomer" ....I guess I Did make that up lol. The straggler part to describe those who bring up the rear of a crowd and the boomer part is short for baby boomers which describes the generation born between the second world war and the Korean war...........................stan

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