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Sunday Morning
A Perfect Sunday…
Includes waking up satisfied
Whether it is from a long week or
A Saturday lived out well.
Sunday is essential and divine
A day to praise and be blessed.
A day to step back from the grind
Visualize softness in all things,
A day to just relish in rest
In touched with our body, family, and healing.
Preparation to start the week again,
Errands collected to be sorted out.
Tidying up or just sit and take a nap.
Wake up and take a meditative walk,
Listen to the oldies and hum a tune,
Catch up on emails or Binge watch.
Sundays are best spent catching up with a great aunt or a best friend.
Going to Sunday dinner to be well fed
Both mentally and spiritually,
While being unconditionally filled.
Playing jumbles or laughing with cousins.
Sundays are a gift to us all.
The day the highway can let out a yawn,
Wait until hotel check outs to be back busy again
Elated passengers driven safely home,
Renewed and joyful to be united
The lassiez a faire in which Sundays appears
Keeps it both holy and perfect.
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-07-10 11:01
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Sunday Morning" captures the essence of a perfect Sunday and the significance of this day in terms of rest, reflection, and connection with loved ones. The imagery and themes presented in the poem are strong and evoke a sense of tranquility and contentment.
One suggestion for improvement would be to work on the flow and structure of the poem. While the overall message is clear, some of the lines and stanzas could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and structure. Consider revisiting the line breaks and punctuation to enhance the flow and musicality of the poem.
Additionally, there are a few instances where the use of specific details could strengthen the imagery and make the poem more vivid. For example, instead of mentioning "the oldies," you could specify a particular song or artist that adds to the nostalgic atmosphere of a Sunday morning.
Finally, consider exploring more unique and unexpected language choices to add depth and originality to the poem. While the current language effectively conveys the message, experimenting with
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Geezer
Mon, 2023-07-10 18:14
I enjoyed all...
the reasons given for a Sunday morning being special, I am just not sure that they
should be all scrunched up together. I think that if you go over it, and look at the order
in which you list them, you can find places where you can delete some lines or words
and make the piece a little more compact and cohesive. Just needs a little TLC, and this can be a stunner!
~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack
Sun, 2023-07-30 20:26
Sunday mornings
Were always for relaxing. One day where things weren't so chaotic. I really enjoyed this.
~RoseBlack~