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Still Alive (May Contest)(Poetic Selfie)

Still alive with all these chores;
Cleaning windows, sweeping floors,
Washing, dusting, folding the laundry
Is there no end? Is there no boundry?

The day winds up, I'm still alive
the poetic elves are up to write.

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You still had fourteen lines to go! I was enjoying the rhyme immensely and BANG, the end! You have such nice easy words to rhyme with there and you just... I mean, come on, alive and write? Rrrrrrrrrr!
Nice work, just feels unfinished. ~ Geezer.
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The poem ends as abruptly as the day ends lol. But I agree that the last 2 lines would work better with this poem if they rhymed

That I'm still alive too
It's a cool one nice to read and quick to end.

Until you live and allow life to past through you you will never understand life.

I rather learn how to fish than beg for one.

selfie why
Rula add on

I want someone to with me vie
don't feel shy

U r scores ahead
even now

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