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special poet friend
You say you’re poor,
and you are forced to fill your days
with mindless, monotonous tasks.
A slave to work!
No secret savings stowed away,
but you can write!
You can compose!
Your Muse can make sweet music in your mind,
string wonder words together so divine,
and you’re a special poet friend of mine!
OK; you wake,
and aches and pains are waiting there,
to ambush you like cruel assassins.
You swallow pills,
and bind supports to both your knees.
The day has dawned:
the day you dread!
But stanzas surface subtly in your soul.
For from a healing heart that once was torn,
a buried thing of beauty now is born!
I know you’re tired
from endless nights of broken sleep
and diabolic dreaming.
Your weekend flew,
and Monday’s blues are waiting round the corner.
You feel washed up like a shell upon the shore,
but from the pier
that fish hooked on my line
I’ll fry it up for you; a dish divine,
'Cause you’re a special poet friend of mine!
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neopoet
Sun, 2023-04-16 10:24
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "special poet friend" is a touching tribute to someone who, despite facing various challenges, can write. The first stanza sets the stage by contrasting the mundane nature of the protagonist's life with their ability to create beautiful words. The second stanza delves deeper into the protagonist's struggles with physical pain and the toll it takes on their daily routine. However, the poem ends on a hopeful note, with the recognition that the creative spirit within the protagonist is still alive and thriving.
One suggested line edit could be to change "diabolic dreaming" in the third stanza to "restless dreaming." This would maintain the sense of exhaustion and difficulty that the protagonist is experiencing, while toning down the negative connotations of "diabolic."
Overall, the poem effectively conveys the idea that creativity can be a source of solace and inspiration in difficult times. The use of rhyme and meter adds to the musicality of the language, making the poem a pleasure to read aloud. The only potential area for improvement is in the use of clichés, such as "shell upon the shore" and "Monday's blues," which can detract from the originality of the piece.
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Geezer
Sun, 2023-04-16 11:28
I do feel...
that our Neo. has this mostly right. However, I think that the avoidance of cliches altogether is not always the best thing. As animals, and things of nature, we are sometimes bound to feeling a certain companionship for them. We get it! ~ Geez.
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