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Son of Weakness

Old timer, what debate do you pose on truth
The one I know freezes passion’s fire
Leaving behind demons that bathe in holy water

Old timer, quit selling those well told lies
Don’t talk about honesty, when yours was tainted
You speak of strength as if you were her child
We both know that you are the son of weakness

Rather than showing scars, you hide them well
In the comfort of walls you built, you cry another’s tears
Oh, old timer quit your war stories, they are of no use

You once told me crying isn’t for big boys,
That holds no merit in the eyes of truth
Reality knows no prayer or leniency

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Comments

it's nice to see you post.

this is some opening, striking hard on the outset.
a lie, is a lie, is a lie.
the visiual of demons bathing in holywater is just shear poetry.
I love the open stanza: right to the point with such a great metaphor.

"Old timer, what debate do you pose on truth
The one I know freezes passion’s fire
Leaving behind demons that bathe in holy water"

BRAVO!!

Eddie
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LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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