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Sensory Desperation
Taste like a smell,
Sight like a sound,
Feeling touch
So viscerally.
Sand in the sky,
Fire in my eye,
Tractor beam
Illusionary.
Pull from within,
Honestly sin,
Careless dream-
Harsh reality.
A whisper so loud,
Out in a crowd,
Singular
Ceremony.
Come baby,
Come and find me.
My darkest hour
So blinding.
Reach out
Through trouble
Daunting,
Sensation desperation,
Hold me, as if
We may never ever
Meet again.
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Psyve
Sun, 2023-03-19 08:20
Visceral!
Very visceral.
Grabbed my attention from the opening lines:
Taste like a smell,
Sight like a sound...
There is a sense of desperation... a blinding light of longing that I sense as i read this.
Beautifully crafted!
Candlewitch
Sun, 2023-03-19 08:30
hello, nice to meet you,
this is very creative, and expressive of someone who's feelings have hit saturation! I hear ya!
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Geezer
Sun, 2023-03-19 08:45
This reminds me...
of a program I saw on 'Synesthesia',
where a person has a condition that causes him to
taste colors. There are other variations where people
taste sounds, etc. I can see that people might feel like their senses
are confused when they have strong emotions. I see that this person has
a kalideioscope of feelings about a relationship, and desperately wants
to explore it, before it passes by in the swirl of things.
I don't know that my interpretation of what you wrote is the right one
but that is how I see it. Anyhow, nicely done! ~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack
Sun, 2023-03-19 09:22
Wow
Grabbed my attention right away! There is something haunting, yet alluring about this piece. Sensory perception plays such a huge role in our day to day life and that need for sensation, for touch and connection in all aspects can be so raw. You displayed all of this in a well composed poem. Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Leslie
Sun, 2023-03-19 21:26
Sensory Desperation
This reminds me a lot of something that Jon Anderson would write. I like it alot and the more I read it the more
like it!
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Jackweb
Thu, 2023-03-23 10:37
Wow!
A wonderful poetry wrought with artistic delivery. Great job dear poet.
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~Jackweb