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The Seagull

Submitted by Blue-eyed Bolla on Mon, 2023-10-23 11:28

The seagull, with his eerie cry,
hangs high up in the summer sky.
He questions not, nor reasons why
his life on Earth will one day die.
Brave bird of prey, he’s full of pride,
flows with wind, the waves, the tide.
When food or female he does seek,
in sing-song voice he starts to shriek.
He steals your lunch from off your lap;
a baguette or a bacon bap.
His noble nature knows no fear.
He scoffs at sinner, saint and seer.
Supreme, he soars above the sea:
The seagull, feisty, fierce and free.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Seagull" captures the essence of the seagull's character and behavior in an engaging manner. Here are a few suggestions to enhance the poem:

1. Consider varying the rhyme scheme: The poem follows an ABAB rhyme scheme throughout, which can become predictable. Experimenting with different rhyme patterns or introducing internal rhymes can add musicality and depth to the poem.

2. Expand on the seagull's characteristics: While the poem touches on the seagull's pride, hunting instincts, and fearlessness, you could further explore its relationship with the sea and its surroundings. This could provide more opportunities to evoke vivid imagery and create a stronger connection between the seagull and its environment.

3. Develop the theme of mortality: The poem briefly mentions the seagull's awareness of its own mortality, but this theme could be expanded upon. Consider exploring the seagull's perspective on life and death, and how it navigates its existence in the face of

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