The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Retired" explores themes of loneliness, loss, and the speaker's withdrawal from the busy world of work. The imagery of the cruel spring day, the ill wind, and the arid cloud effectively convey the speaker's desolation and isolation. The use of rhyme and rhythm adds a sense of musicality to the poem.

One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the emotional depth of the poem. While the speaker's feelings of loneliness and emptiness are clear, it would be beneficial to delve deeper into the reasons behind these emotions. Exploring the speaker's past experiences, regrets, or unfulfilled desires could add layers of complexity to the poem.

Additionally, consider incorporating more vivid and specific imagery to enhance the reader's connection to the speaker's emotions. For example, instead of using the phrase "left lifeless in a corpse-clad shroud," consider using concrete details that evoke a stronger visual image.

Overall, "Retired" effectively captures the theme of loneliness and

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the AI says. I was a little unsure of the use of unfrequented, but looked it up, and it does work that way, although not well. Maybe just arrange the line differently and use another form of infrequent? ~ Geez.
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A real sense of loneliness here. Even the flow and pace feel lonely. You've captured how some people may feel about retirement. Hmm...I feel the need to disagree regarding "unfrequented" (sorry, Geezer!) for two reasons: I like the alliteration it shares with "upon" in the same sentence, but also, that "un" declares the intensity and looks and feels more pronounced to the theme of the poem - the loneliness. My very humble opinion, though. :) Another wonderful poem from you. You capture the highs and lows we all experience in life.
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for having an opposing viewpoint. I don't consider myself to be the ultimate authority on anything, and certainly won't be offended for your having a different opinion. [I have been known to change my mind when someone presents a good argument, and you have presented a good one]. ~ Geez.
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