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Reedswood Road

street like a circumpunct

a concrete toybox

with a hatchback heartbeat


brick-orgies of houses loom over

the lawns shaved with diamonds

the rituals

the microcosm


conjoined houses breeding

dull children

with photograph senses

with monotonous syndrome

with weak bodies and clean teeth


the clocks are lazy here



last month I was rewarded by dead badger

head draped over curb

like a masterpiece


by noon he’d been cleaned away

to a tupperware tomb


maybe next year It’ll be the neighbours

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
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How was my language use?
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Last few words: 
Trying to convey the monotonous and soulless aspects of suburban life.
Editing stage: 


even though i have read
but am not yet dead
dwarfed mind instead


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