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Real Gone Rhyme

My poetry did charm and cheer
as I sat sobbing in my beer.
It held me (like a faithful friend)
when world of mine was at an end.

Throughout my lost and languid life,
(while shackled to a wolfish wife)
those stanzas bid me bide my time;
they sang sometimes; was so sublime!

In dungeon’s dank, dark days and nights;
temptations, trials, fond fancy’s flights;
when life had left me all alone,
and all my wildest oats were sown,

they whispered, in a still small voice,
(which made this rhyming rogue rejoice.)
They vowed true love would visit me
by streams of sweet serenity,

where I would tread my twilight years,
with Venus, through this vale of tears.
That from those sobs I’d sown in time
I’d reap romance and real gone rhyme!

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with the "real gone rhyme". Your pattern and rhyme is good, the language use is good, and the theme is one of a jocular- nature, that makes a great rhymer. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Thanks Geezer, for your encouraging feedback.

KBloor

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Hello, KBloor!
I think this should be made into a drinking song sang at the pub as everyone clinks their mugs together! It's wild and wonderful! Hooray for your romance AND your real gone rhyme!
L

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