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POE REINCARNATED

A raven wakened me today,
delivered me from moldy bed
liberating me to stray
from considering the dead.

I have awakened to a dream,
some poets neglecting rhyme.
Picture boxes sit and scream.
People have no sense of time.

Time proceeds here without ticking,
clock hands sweeping, never ticking,
typist typing without clicking.
My past will return nevermore.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Written as a response to a challenge to write about Poe's thought were he to awaken today....in under 60 words
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I love this! It is no mystery that I love Poe and the Raven is the inspiration for many things to me. I think you rose to the challenge splendidly!!!! Well done!

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Thank you. I was a bit worried about the title as I thought some might think I was claiming to be Poe reincarnated . i should be as talented lol...............stan

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I was...it was beautifully done

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Loved it, though there was too much ticking in the last stanza.
Would the second one be sticking, and not ticking as the persistent tic tock drove me mad, and opened another can of worms yuk!
Yours from my six by two, Ian .T just call and drop in for tea He He

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

The poem is supposed to be in the style Poe might use and the last stanza was an attempt at near mimic of of "someone rapping, slightly tapping at my chamber door." I overdid it in hopes that the connection would be made. I'll keep your idea in mind during eventual edit. I understand ya'll have had a bit of rain over there. Hope it hasn't caused you problems. I'm sitting here looking at icy snow shining in the morning light just before it resumes melting...........stan

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That was Poe..the repetition made his works intense as did the excessive rhyming....his words ran together in a madness only he could write...in a way that only he could make it make sense....

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

He surely had a style of his own. Perhaps I should be worried that I mimiced it so easily lol...........stan

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way to go, stan! love this.

Alid

thank you..........stan

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One of my favorites by you and that says it all.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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I guess it sometimes takes a challenge to get me going lol. I'm proud you think highly of it...............stan

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I agree totally with Wesley it has to be one of my favourites but your poem from the complete poem workshop is also a close favourite :) your writing has matured so much over the years you really should be very proud of your talent and how far you have come, Poe reincarnated indeed :)

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Hope the sun hasn't fried you down there yet lol. I'm pretty surprised at the response I'm getting on this poem which was written for a contest on another site which required me to write as if I was Poe dropped into the modern world. Not too hard of a thing to do. But it also required it be done in 60 words or less. Hell it usually takes me that many words just to get started.Thought my head was going to explode. I almost didn't post it here and when I decided to I worried that the title would lead people to think I was equating myself to Poe. Your comment kinda reinforces that. Hmmm...... I seldom change titles but I'm really thinking about doing so with this one. I KNOW I'm no Poe and don't want people believing that I think I am.:( . I'm glad you like this and appreciate your dropping by for a read...............stan

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I can't write a stanza that small.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Should have seen this one before I counted words and started pruning............sytan

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