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A Penguin named Jane
In my dreams
I see you dancing
naked on the sand
veils dropping
pearlescent skin
rosebud nipples
and a waxed netherland,
awake me from sleep
In my days
I see you in the kitchen
in boxers and a singlet
whether it be a dream
or in my waking days
I've never wanted you more
never loved you more
You are my people
and I am yours
I am your Penguin
for life
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
I want to thank Seren/Jayne for helping me with this late valentines for my beautifully talented compassionate wife Jane.
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Seren
Fri, 2023-02-17 01:08
Dear L
Oh I love this. I didn't do that much but I'm glad if I could assist you.
Your Jane is an angel for putting up with your work schedule lol. I know it makes your days together that much more special.
I'm blushing because of one thing and you know why hahaha. Just don't write about our Janes and mines visits to your know where, I'll slap your ass.
I actually wouldn't change a thing I can't wait for you to show her tell me what she thought!!
Much love Always OJ xox
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Lightning Dust
Wed, 2023-06-14 11:18
Dear OJ
Thank you sorry for the late response
Love L & J x
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2023-02-17 07:05
Penguin
I can only assume this is somewhat of a personal statement you two have made to each other. Penguins mate for life and a lot of cooperation goes into their relationships and family units.
Well done,
Tim
Lightning Dust
Wed, 2023-06-14 11:24
G'day Tim
Soz for the late reply, as an engineer my job takes me everywhere. Seren-Jayne is a close friend of my wife and myself. We live in the same town. She's good people. We love her. My Jane is my Penguin we've been together for all our lives since we were young-uns.
Thanks for the comment.
Cheers Latham
author commentRoseBlack
Fri, 2023-02-17 17:17
Such a sweet poem
Penguins are adorable and mate for life. Your devotion to your Jane is beautiful.
~RoseBlack~
Lightning Dust
Wed, 2023-06-14 11:25
Hi Roseblack
Thank you for your kind words. She's my everything.
Cheers Latham
author commentSeren
Wed, 2023-06-14 08:40
Dear L
I had to come and visit and let you know there is a message for you on the poem you visited last night, from another poet here, I think you'll be very pleased to read it, I hope you liked my suggestions. Check your email.
love OJ
p.s. Don't forget to answer peoples' comments nudge nudge nudge!!! hahaha Big smile. ;)
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Lightning Dust
Wed, 2023-06-14 11:29
Dear OJ
I will take a look at your poem and find it thanks for the heads up. I have gone through your suggestions. Thanks muchly for the help.
I remember you saying those words on your return from the funeral. I'll never forget them. They've stuck with me.
Hope you're feeling better!
Love L & J
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