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Peevish Poets

When planets glow before Aurora’s rise
and stars seem scattered ‘cross the moonless skies,
I walk the leafy paths that take me home;
I have no inclination, now, to roam.

I pass the trembling trees, whose leaves have bled,
and share their sorrow for the leaves they’ve shed.
The dawn is breaking, far off, in the east
and sounds of sighing ghosts have long-since ceased.

‘Neath rolling clouds upon the heathered vales
the dew drops wet the wings of nightingales,
as they seek solace ‘midst the brightening bowers,
shelter from cruel autumn’s senseless showers.

And I walk on, down old familiar lanes;
I hurry, to avoid the coming rains.
I mutter to myself, (that’s just my age.)
And peevish poets often rant and rage.

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I like the vintage feel of the thing. The “grumpy old poet” goes a walking.

Good job
Tim

Thank you, Tim.

KBloor

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I have to firstly apologise I read this earlier and I forgot to push send on my lengthy message, I really loved this walk. I always take walks with one particular poet in word, he writes of his wanderings, and I love it. To see the world through someone else eyes in words? well you can make it whatever construct you want from their words to your head.

I agree with Tim it does have a vintage feel to it.

Well done!! I don't see anything I would change or edit.

Btw that title is perfect.

Kind Regards Seren

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Many thanks, Seren. I often wander lonely as a cloud... My verse sometimes comes to me when I'm walking. Thank you for your kind comments and helpful feedback on my poor little rhymes. It is much appreciated.

KBloor

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