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NO SPRING CHICKEN
I was already getting old
the year they first made dirt
and on that day so clear and cold
some of it soiled my clean shirt.
So I saddled up my dinosaur
to go down to the new formed river
where a dry ravine was before.
The icy water made me shiver.
The first crow egg had just hatched out
( yep the egg came before the crow)
and the first red wood was a mere sprout
it had just begun to grow.
The ocean water had no salt
'cause it was pure sans dino piss *note below
the earth was smooth without a fault
although I'd not swear to this.
I watched the whales learn how to swim
basked in polar sun ere it turned cold
Ozymandias ? Yes I knew him.
I reckon that I'm getting old.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
*note. This line is in reference to my poem "a Taste of Salt"
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-03-15 11:17
it almost hurts to laugh...
I, also feel my springs have sprung, lol. I like this very much, age and humor!
*hugs, Cat
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scribbler
Tue, 2022-03-15 22:20
HiCat
It takes some humor to deal with age
Geezer
Tue, 2022-03-15 13:56
Hey...
I remember you! You lived down the road from me and we went to school together! I was the one who dipped little Wilma's pigtails in the dinosaur shit. LoL This was lots of fun! Had a great laugh! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
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scribbler
Tue, 2022-03-15 22:22
Hi Geeze
yeah the continents were drifting so fast that walking to school was up hill both ways.
Ray Whitaker
Fri, 2022-03-18 11:27
Lovely!
made me smile. Another piece from you that is so well done, Sir!
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scribbler
Fri, 2022-03-18 23:01
Hi Ray
Thanks for taking the time to read
lovedly
Fri, 2022-03-18 23:22
you stan speak of humour
reading your comments made me laugh and what a price had i to pay guess two implants fell broken i am doing nothing as of now except till two more are broke meaning i'm broke ha ha
scribbler
Sat, 2022-03-19 09:59
lol
they can break our bank accounts and our boys but they can't break our spirit lol