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Naughty Or Nice (December Contest)

Submitted by Rula on Thu, 2022-12-15 04:07

I don't know if
you find it naughty,
but I find it nice,
Gazing into the beauty
of the quiet naked skies.

I find it nice to sneak
through the shining stars;
those to be closer
and many other afar.

I'll be stealing a look
onto the sleepy moon,
for it makes me flying
Like a musical tune.

And yes,
if you find it naughty,
I find it nice,
staring in your beauty,
not only once ,
but a million times.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
December 2022 Random Challenge Naughty or Nice
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 06:01

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a great entry and answer to the challenge! it sounds even better when read out loud, it rolls right off the tongue!

*love & hugs, Cat

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-15 06:18

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change made and noted ;)

*love, Cat

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Rula

Thu, 2022-12-15 06:43

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I am grateful for the your kind comments. I am happy to know it has your approval.
Thank you so much.

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Rosewood Apothecary

Thu, 2022-12-15 17:18

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What a really unconventional approach to that challenge and a really great poem. Awesome idea, good execution. Like Cat said a breeze to read. It just pulls you right along.

Tim

Rula

Fri, 2022-12-16 06:37

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Thank you so much for your non endong encouraging words. You made my day with such a comment
Always grateful sir.

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Lavender

Thu, 2022-12-15 18:03

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Hi, Rula,
This has a lovely feel to it, softly traveling upward and beyond. Beautiful final line!
L

Rula

Fri, 2022-12-16 06:43

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Your kind comments warms my heart and urges my muse to bring more.
Always appreciate your feedback and comments

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lovedly

Fri, 2022-12-16 05:31

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and of course NICEEEEEEEEEEeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Rula

Fri, 2022-12-16 06:44

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You're so kind. Your comment adds to my happiness.
Thank you!

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lovedly

Fri, 2022-12-16 07:05

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there lies only one path
of sowing down
seeds of happiness

Time will just pass
and perfumes of Roses
towards the sky cast

as long as watering lasts
ma'am

Emerald1

Sat, 2022-12-17 09:55

Such a creative take on the prompt , reads so beautifully with exquisite imagery , a delightful starlight filled experience /read

Rula

Sun, 2022-12-18 06:32

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for the kind visit. I wish all to join the party.
Looking forward to reading of your work.

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RoseBlack

Thu, 2022-12-29 19:47

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Way of tackling this challenge and beautifully written as always.

~RoseBlack~

Rula

Fri, 2022-12-30 02:43

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You really make my day!

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Seren

Fri, 2023-02-17 02:12

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This is just Gorgeous. I'm so taken with this one.

Congratulations on your win it's much deserved my friend.

Wow I am still there.

Love Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Rula

Sun, 2023-04-02 13:11

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Hello dear Serene
Thank you for your congrats.
Always great to hear from you dear.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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