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My Love

Submitted by Kristen H. on Wed, 2023-04-19 14:46

Your hands are perfectly gentle and strong.
I’ve seen them turn wrenches,
and balled tight in anger.
I’ve seen the way they glide across your steering wheel,
and across my skin.

You hold my hand in yours
like it’s made of pure gold,
and you carry my heart all the same.

And your eyes…
Emerald green,
soft when you look at me,
sharp when you protect me.
both are beautiful.

Your skin is soft to the touch,
your smile makes me weak.

The way you say my name,
the name that only you know…
It feels like Home.

You wrap me up in your warmth every night
and kiss me under the stars.

You take my hand and guide me outside
Just to listen to rain hitting the leaves.

You’re my best friend,
My guide,
My shield,
My confidant,
My love.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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neopoet

Wed, 2023-04-19 14:46

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "My Love" is a beautiful tribute to a significant other. The poet has used vivid imagery to describe various aspects of their partner, including their hands, eyes, skin, and smile. The poem is structured in short, concise stanzas that effectively convey the poet's feelings.

One of the strengths of the poem is the use of contrast. The poet juxtaposes the strength of their partner's hands with their gentle touch, and the sharpness of their eyes with their softness when looking at the poet. This contrast creates a sense of complexity and depth in the relationship, and adds to the overall emotional impact of the poem.

The use of repetition, particularly with the phrase "my," reinforces the deep connection between the poet and their partner. The repetition of this phrase emphasizes the various roles that their partner plays in their life, from best friend to confidant to love.

One suggested line edit could be to remove the word "both" in the line "both are beautiful." This would make the line flow more smoothly and eliminate any unnecessary repetition.

Overall, "My Love" is a touching and well-crafted poem that effectively captures the poet's love and admiration for their partner.

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-04-19 17:49

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you describe make this poem very personal and shows the things you love about this person:
"You're my best friend
My guide
My shield
My confident
My love"

I found it to be very romantic and well written. ~ Geezer.
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Kristen H.

Wed, 2023-04-19 19:51

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Thank you very much, Geezer! I find it difficult to write a poem about a person without noting physical attributes but I'm working on it as we speak. It's just a draft right now so hopefully I can edit it and finish it in a reasonable amount of time. But of course, you can't rush poetry.

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