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Missin A Passionate Time

A tender memory of a first love's moment
A time of prime , beautiful blooms of blushing
A missing of playfulness and loving hugs
where the sun was bright, the sky a blue hue sweet and new
soft gentle touches spreading sensations unfelt before.
The passionate time, a fresh feeling of the souls meeting.
Missing the soft spoken words that would tug at the heart.
Forever felt even when apart
A tickle of emotions, made to feel all giddy full of happiness
A fresh new start in loves hearts.

Dori Love

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I just wrote this today I have not been doing much about my poetry lately so I hope I do not offend or upset anyone on the subject here I enjoy writing and want to begin again and make more time for it thank you Dori
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I am new
I hope everyone will enjoy my poetry
I hope to learn more on what I am doing wrong and make correction as I go along
I do like to share what's within my heart or thoughs or my mind
Thank you
Dori

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hello, and welcome to Neopoet. we are glad to have you here. if you have any questions, I would be glad to answer them. If you need help, just ask me. if I cannot help, I will find someone who can.
in your title, you forgot the (g) in Missin{g)

I really like these lines:

Missing the soft spoken words that would tug at the heart.
Forever felt even when apart
A tickle of emotions, made to feel all giddy full of happiness
A fresh new start in loves hearts.

I hope to read more of your work in the future.

&hugs, Cat

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I did that on purpose
I guess I should use more better grammar
I appreciate your thoughts and if I do need some help I willl get a hold of you Cat
Thank you
Dori
Have A Great Day!

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