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Miss Kitty Has Spoken

Submitted by William Lynn on Sat, 2024-01-20 12:10

As I sit to write a few thoughts, behind me on her favorite sill is Ms. Kitty.
Miss Kitty looking from "her" window, at "her" yard, and probably wondering
why those wild turkeys think they can come and go as they please.
We've had this conversation before, yet with very little resolution.

We have also discussed other topics with similar results,
both having had our say with little hope of convincing one another.
Such is the life of a cat that has to put up with wayward turkeys
pecking away in her yard and the man pecking away
at that thing he calls a keyboard.

Now, not having written even a sentence about that which
I originally sat down to ponder, I have been informed that
it is time for me to leave that endeavor for another day,
because Ms. Kitty has said so.

Style / type:

Free verse

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How was my language use?

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Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

Neopoet Weekly 01/14/24 to 01/20/24

Content level:

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neopoet

Sat, 2024-01-20 18:10

Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Miss Kitty Has Spoken" effectively uses a conversational tone and humor to depict the relationship between the speaker and Miss Kitty. The anthropomorphism of the cat, attributing human-like thoughts and opinions to her, adds a layer of charm and relatability to the piece.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. The varying line lengths and syllable counts create a somewhat disjointed reading experience. Establishing a more consistent rhythm could enhance the flow of the poem and make it more engaging for the reader.

Additionally, the poem could explore more deeply the dynamic between the speaker, Miss Kitty, and the turkeys. Currently, the turkeys serve more as a backdrop than a significant element of the narrative. Developing this aspect could add another layer of complexity and interest to the poem.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more vivid and concrete imagery. While the current descriptions give a general sense of the scene, more detailed and sensory language could help the reader more fully envision the setting and characters. For instance, describing the appearance of the turkeys or the sound of the keyboard could enhance the reader's immersion in the poem.

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2024-01-20 15:19

Dear Will,

I love your title. Miss Kitty seems like a very intuitive Cat as she surveys her Queendom! Sometimes there is no resolution in an argument/discussion. Sometimes it is best to agree to disagree. I love the way you out yourself in the last two verses!

*hugs, Cat

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William Lynn

Sat, 2024-01-20 17:55

She knows she is the boss of

She knows she is the boss of our outfit. I NEVER win a discussion with her, although I keep trying.
Best wishes, Will

author comment

Lavender

Sun, 2024-01-21 17:49