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Memories afloat

Moss grows in damp dark
Split tree leaves
Reveal a long lost scent
Of what I've learnt was Sassafras

The water flows
Floating memories away
Bubbling down the brook

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Sassafras is a sweet smelling spring flowering tree from Southern Australia.... Very clunky words I know...
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All this poem needs is a little punctuation to clarify a separation in thoughts.
My PM mentioned Stan's workshop on Imagery in Poetry. I hope you will consider it. Your poem is full of the sort of imagery the shop will be talking about.

No word is "clunky" if it enhances the poem. Your description of Sassafras is the poem.

W. H. Snow

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Thanks Mr Snow
I ll check out the workshop in imagery.....

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and welcome to Neopoet!

I much enjoyed your poem, such lovely imagery!! I hope to read more of your work soon.

always, Cat

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Thanks Cat!
Its such a great site. I've never done anything like this before. People here on neopoet are grand!

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Nothing clunky about it.
Are you an Aussie? Please fill out your profile a bit more so we can get to know you better.

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