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Lovebird

My true love is a nightingale,
shy singer in a shady lee,
or gorgeous bird of paradise:
that rainbow-colored symphony.

Sometimes she is a turtle dove,
a gentle bird, naive, unwise.
At night, bodacious bird of prey
that swoops, like death, from savage skies.

At times she is a wee wan wren:
a frail and fragile feathered thing.
Some days she soars like eagle bold
on most majestic, mighty wing.

I love her when she simply sings:
like skylark on a dreary day!
But mostly when she swoops like swift
in summer's breathless, brief ballet.

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I love everything about this. Every. Thing. This one I want to read again and again. There are subtle shifts in rhythm that come and go like the different songbirds. Really excellent job with this one.

Tim

Many thanks, Tim

KBloor

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you must be an avid bird-watcher! I really enjoy the words used to describe the different birds and the mood created. There is an economy of words, but it says so much. ~ Geezer.
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Thank you

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Many thanks, E.

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