Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Llandudno, the land of dreams

Llandudno’s is a foreign land,
with language you don’t understand,
but deep in love with her you’ll fall
when you have heard her deep heart’s call.

It's by a sacred, surging sea
of sacramental symmetry,
with sandless beach of shingled stones,
as burnt and bleached as dead men’s bones.

It has a rusty, old, grey pier,
a remnant of her yesteryear
when walkers had more time to kill
and days were longer, calmer, still.

It has a pretty promenade,
as beautiful as bearded bard.
It’s long and wide as ocean deep,
with wind to dry the tears you weep.

Like queen, it sits upon a quay,
like mermaid in her majesty.
A star-encrusted, sceptred isle
that breathes out beauty to beguile.

I swear, it is the land of dreams,
where sorrow's face no longer seems
so savage, like a rabid beast,
since sadness there's forever ceased.

For connoisseurs, there is a taste
of heaven, that they dare not waste;
so silently it slips away,
like love they yearned for, yesterday.

With meditative state of mind,
this fantasy you'll surely find,
along the coast, beside the sea,
an echo of eternity

that leaves you still and calm inside;
its tender, tranquil, turning tide
will touch you, take away your fears;
its warming wind holds back the years.

Escape to this idyllic cove,
with lovers, who with romance rove,
upon the Orme, along the pier,
where all their heartaches disappear.

This land is like a magic morn,
where poet in your soul was born,
as you lay dreaming on the beach
of love, as it swam out of reach.

It is the sweetest seagull’s song,
a sigh for love that won’t last long.
Since life’s a wave we can’t control,
a morning’s promenading stroll.

Beside the sea's the way, the truth:
the love you yearned for in your youth
that breathed on you one summer's day,
a dream divine that would not stay.

At last, you've found the lovebirds’ dream,
a nest, where love can flow like stream.
Where passion in the blood can burn
and lessons of true love you’ll learn.

Like heaven, it's a holy place,
a garden paradise of grace,
where sinners stroll, or sit and stare,
and breathe the breeze and salt sea air.

Llandudno's quaint, genteel and nice,
a picture-perfect paradise.
A magic world of make believe
that you'll take with you when you leave.  

Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
Llandudno - a lovely spot upon the coast
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

You've done the town proud, mate.
a lovely piece that has just tempted me
to take a ride there this summer,
I intended to do the whole coast
whilst I still have a bit of a spring in my arse.

Cheers, Obi.

Many thanks, for the feedback, Obi. Yeah, Hopefully, I'll be heading for the coast this summer.

KBloor

author comment

Your poem is like a dream - you describe a wonderful paradise. So off to Google I went. Wow...the beautiful picture you painted with your words. "...where poet in your soul was born." A little bit of heaven, both your poem and Llandudno.
Thank you!
L

Thank you, L.

KBloor

author comment

I never faltered once in reading this. Well, maybe once.
The cadence is near perfection all the way through,
the only falter is the "Llandudno", it being such an odd word,
but it slips into obscurity the minute you begin the actual reading.
I've read it aloud, [a true test] and found it not wanting anywhere.

Having read the other's comments after I finished mine, I looked it up, and still found it an odd word!

Very nice! ~ Geezer.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Hiya, Geez, If you think its a difficult word to read
you're in for a spittle shower saying it mate !!

just like all those Ll words in sci-fi and fantasy novels. Spittle shower, huh? I like that phrase, I may use it sometime. ~Geez.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thank you, Geezer. Yeah, I suppose you can substitute any place of your dreams for Llandudno. It is a strange word to me also, since I'm English. Lovely place though.

KBloor

author comment

It’s never got old or tired and it stays right on topic. I’m very, very impressed. If I could suggest one thing…

but deep in love with her you’ll fall
when you have heard her (deep) heart’s call.

Maybe change that second deep to “vast” or some other appropriate one syllable modifying word.

Unbelievable precision,
Tim

Many thanks, Tim, for the feedback. I will certainly look into that line you've mentioned. Again, many thanks.

KBloor

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.