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LIBERATION

Once upon a time...
There was a family.
THE MILITARY was the word and the silence.
They all thanked God
on the sly
in the bathroom
and not at the table.
In that family...
the children ran fast
at the back of the church
with their eyes lost,
longing to be able to enter sometime
to say to the Virgin of the Charity of Cobre
as their grandmother taught them
God save you, Mary!
The old family
had to forget Christmas Eve
and the birth of Jesus,
just because…
THE MILITARY said so.
A day I don't remember, but I love that it happened...
The old family is reborn.
Sacred Heart is back where it belongs.
Everywhere is part of prayer.
Children offer flowers to the Virgin,
and love and understanding preside the Christmas.
Because the newborn child sows peace
in the stiff cap of...
THE MILITARY

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welcome to Neopoet! it is very good to meet you. if you need any help navigating the site, I offer you my assistance. if you have any questions, I will try to answer them. If I cannot, I will find someone who can. I see you are an early riser, me too.
I have some confusion in understanding your poem. it is probably my fault, as I know very little about the military. also my religion is Wicca, so I don't know much about organized religion. when I was a child, I went to the church of some thing called the seventh day Adventist. and that was an abusive relationship.

*hugs, Cat

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you say that The Military has chosen to deny the Christian religion and you are glad? But then you praise the family for bringing back Christmas. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Having read your piece a couple of times, i like the use of your images.

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