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Last Letter

A groom, unnerved,
wondering whether his bride will show
at church.

Dad pacing corridors,
waiting for baby
to be born.

Committing a murder,
knowing God’s salvation of your soul
is improbable.

A grown man’s hope
that dawn will dispel
night terror.

Death Row,
anticipating the governor’s reprieve
on the eve of execution.

Irrevocably,
I know for certain
you’ve penned me
your last letter.

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I appreciate all critiquing.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

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my three poems are in waiting
no one on neo has any time for me
so I am thinking
of hibernating
consider this as a lost letter
not last
from me
Gracy

Dear lovedly, thanks for visiting and your encouraging words. I'll take a look at your poems now. There are so many new members posting and nobody takes any notice of them, so I just commented on their posts.
Best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

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kindly read the younger ones
we are now senior enough
let's encourage them

the resignation; the foreboding feeling that the writer has in knowing the end is here. All to often, we instinctivly know. The tone of a letter, the things that are said... Nice work. ~ Geez.
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Dear Geez, thanks for visiting and understanding. Yes, that's my intention, you're right. It's about a girl who marries a psycopath and those are the stages of the marriage, letters included.
Best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

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I see all types of last letters here, I would like to wait to hear more about this one, it's very different from you. I can't wait to hear more.

Thank you...Teddy

Dear Teddy, this is about a girl who marries a domineering psycho. The poem is about the stages of their marriage, including the letters. It all ends badly and she keeps the letters because she loved him, despite all...
Thanks for coming by, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

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Sends shivers down my spine.
Very dark, I like it very much.

Thank you...Teddy

Dear Teddy, sorry about the shivers! I'm glad you like it. All the best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

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