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I Was Right All Along
I’ve always had this little hunch
Just a tiny feeling
That you had bad intentions
Something you were concealing
I pushed those thoughts away
Ignored my screaming thoughts
But then my friend came along
And made that bubble pop
She told me the awful things you said
It was hard for me to listen
I realized that all this time
You really had been the villain
You were plotting behind my back
And treating me like garbage
Even though I was there for you
When things got the hardest
You acted like you were there for me
But stabbed me in the back
And what hurts worst of all
Is I’m only now seeing through your mask
How long have you been doing this
Faking that you cared
Acting like our friendship
Was a feeling that we shared?
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Sun, 2023-05-14 23:45
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "I Was Right All Along" captures the feeling of betrayal and realization that comes with discovering someone's true intentions. The use of simple language and straightforward structure effectively conveys the speaker's emotions without being overly dramatic.
One possible line edit could be to change "It was hard for me to listen" to "It was hard for me to hear." This subtle change could add more emphasis on the emotional impact of the friend's revelation.
Overall, the poem effectively explores the theme of friendship and betrayal. The use of imagery and word choice effectively conveys the speaker's emotions and the impact of the friend's betrayal. The addition of the suggested line edit could further enhance the emotional impact of the poem.
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