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I Knew

I KNEW
You were dressed in blue that day,
Your hair a lovely amber tide
Spilling in waves
Upon your shoulders.
And I knew.

You were smiling softly,
Eyes bright and dancing,
Your face a shining beacon
To all who passed your way.
And I knew.

I watched from the shadows,
Well beyond your notice
And fully aware
Of my privileged place.
And I knew.

Enthralled, my heart swelling,
I could but stare at you
And humbly thank God
That you had finally come.
And I knew.

Though we had yet to meet
That I would spend
The rest of my life
Loving you.
Yes, I knew

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it is very nice to meet you. I love this poem! I usually can find favorite lines to quote back to you but in this case, I love all of it!! good title, language usage smooth and fluid... all over, very nicely done. one of the best love poems I have ever read! I see nothing I would change.

*hugs, Cat

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your poem; "I knew" that the title was a good one. [Sorry, I couldn't resist].
Yes, there is a certain emotion that overcomes us, when we know that this is the "one".
This is a really great poem about one of those times.
Nothing that I would change! Looking forward to seeing what else you got! ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

I can't stop reading this poem because it has a fine ending. With this ending, the readers ends up being closer to the experience. The situation is brought to life through the speech of the subject within the world of the poem and give the work a more intimate feel- which is what you'd want to happen in a poem.

Nice piece!

Onyinyechi Cosmos

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CONGRATS poet

may I be the first to congratulate you on your win of poet of the week!

*hugs, Cat

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Yeah! It’s just like that isn’t it. This is an amazing poem.

Tim

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