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Holy Alphabet

Submitted by Blue-eyed Bolla on Tue, 2023-03-28 08:22

A is for Abel, was murdered by brother.
B is for Beautiful, Eve, Abel's mother.
C is for Cain, who was killer primeval.
D is for Devil, inventor of evil.
E is for Earth, that most fortunate planet.
F is for Father: The God, who began it.
G is for Grace that is free, but expensive.
H is for Holy, to sinners offensive.
I is for Ignorance, everyone’s pleading.
J is for Jesus, who did all the bleeding.
K is for Kiss, of betrayal by traitor.
L is for Life everlasting - comes later.
M is for Mary, she's Christ's holy mother.
N is for Nature of Christ: Like no other!
O is for Only the Bible is candid.
P is for Peter, the rock, he was branded.
Q is for Quest, for the Truth; ask the preacher!
R is for Rabbi, it's Jewish for teacher.
S is for Sermon, that soul-saving volley.
T is for Turning, to faith, from your folly.
U is for Uttermost you can be saved to.
V is for Vision that faith it will give you.
W's for Water that we cannot walk on.
X is for Xmas, the ‘Christ’ part has long gone.
Y is for Yes! Easter’s tomb was vacated!
Z is for Zeus, to our God unrelated.

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neopoet

Tue, 2023-03-28 08:22

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

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The poem "Holy Alphabet" by an unknown author is a religiously themed alphabetical list of various people, concepts, and terms. The poem attempts to capture the essence of Christianity by using the alphabet as a framework to present the fundamentals of the faith, but unfortunately falls short in its execution. The poem feels disjointed and lacks coherence, making it difficult for the reader to engage with the text.

One of the major flaws in the poem is the lack of consistency in the tone and style. The poem shifts from a serious to a playful tone, making it hard to know how to interpret the text. For example, the line "X is for Xmas, the ‘Christ’ part has long gone" feels dismissive of the holiday's religious significance, which may not resonate with all readers.

Additionally, some of the lines feel forced and do not flow well within the poem's structure. For instance, "N is for Nature of Christ: Like no other!" does not fit well with the alphabetical sequence and feels out of place in the overall theme of the poem.

One suggested line edit could be to revise the line "X is for Xmas, the ‘Christ’ part has long gone" to "X is for Xmas, when Christ's birth is celebrated." This edit would help maintain the poem's religious focus and avoid alienating readers who may take offense at the original wording.

Overall, while the poem's attempt to present the fundamentals of Christianity through the alphabet is a creative idea, the execution is lacking, and the poem feels disjointed and inconsistent in tone and style.

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-03-28 10:18

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I think that 'Neo' has got this one wrong, when it says that the line: "X is for Christmas, the Christ part is long gone" isn't relevant. I got what the author meant right away. Many people who celebrate Christmas, feel like those who do not celebrate the holiday as the birthday of Christ, but just another consumer experience are the very same people have started calling it
X-Mas, so as not to offend those of other religions, and boost sales of merchandise. ~ Geezer.
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Blue-eyed Bolla

Tue, 2023-03-28 11:25

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Thanks, Geezer. Yeah, I stand corrected over the Xmas thing. I have been told that In Greek, the language of the New Testament, the word Christos (Christ) begins with the letter "X," and that Christmas and Xmas are synonymous terms. I think Neo misses the human touch slightly when commenting and feeding back. lol

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