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Hello young Julie

Submitted by Julie50 on Sun, 2022-10-09 00:34

Dear Julie,
I have alot to say. For you are getting older every day.
You'll have so much fun being young, shall
I tell you what's to come?
You'll have a good life but you will have to fight
for it. There will be challenges this is true
but you will make it through.
There will be many good times and blessings to come. Your fun has just begun.
You're sixty one now, smart and wise.
You've been through some rough times,
but you survived!
So I just wanted to say hi, don't change a
thing. Things always work out when you believe. And all that you've achieved.
So be proud of yourself and be strong
for the wait for you won't be long.
You'll be here soon where I am and we'll
be together again.
I love you
Julie

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Lavender

Sun, 2022-10-09 18:10

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Hi, Julie,
A tender poem full of optimism and encouragement! Don't know of your intentions, but you may want to actually enter it into the Poem to Your Childhood Self Contest! It certainly fits the subject criteria.
Thank you!
Lavender

Rosewood Apothecary

Sun, 2022-10-09 21:03

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Looking back on a life well lived, not an easy life, a good life. Many more good years to come. Great poem, good rhyme.

Tim

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