A write from your heart and lovely too! Tell us what you see from where you are let us feel the place where you are, your departed hear your call though you only have to whisper their names, Yours Ian.T

your last poem, I'v been following your posts. This one, right from the start is filled with a mild sense of loss/sadness.

Using a lone star going dim is quite powerful. The poem doesn't say much, however, just a little. In all, I can say it's quite touchy (drew the awws again).

It's a nice poem, and, like the previous one, I like it.

The idea in this poem is lovely, I hope you edit it a bit to clean it up as it is worth it.

"One smile tonight, went stale
And caused me many a tear............................many a tear...oh no, not good these words here for me, a tad cliché
What thoughts, I ask, could fail
One to sense the death that’s near.......thoughts that fail? the death, who or...
To take away the beauty in that smile
And leave me tasting bile?"........................shiver. green acrid bile. If the poem had been on a nasty subject one could end using this substance but.....?

There's are thoughts on this Ammknonadu,
Its worth working on I feel yours Ann.

The point is to break down a poet's work that it may be built again in better form.
I think not here though.
Sometimes we say things through poetry that are not meant to be rearranged.
If I would change anything here, it would be to alter the circumstances that caused the poem be written at all.
When I come to another of your works that is not so crisp with reality I will give you that raw truth you asked for.
But I think not here.
wesley

I like this poem for it's sheer, honest, simplicity!
Well done!

I feel I want to withdraw my comment in many ways, being so taken up with the poem, Wesley said it so well, I agree with him. I am not a poetry specialist, I only give my opinion, not based on any thorough education in poetry.
I understand your strong feelings, I sympathise,
Love Ann.

intelligent and thoughtful. But you got it wrong.

As I've said before, your writing is superb, but that does not make truth.

You will die and there will be nothing left.

There is not truth, only those that we create for ourselves while we live, all the sages, philosophers, religions seek it, but no one can find it. That's why I like the Tao(The Way), when you think you have found The Way, it isn't there.
But having this ideal is not a bad thing from many points of view. As long as we do what we feel is our best, whatever that is!